at writing stuff. I asked 2 of my friends what they thought of this and now i want to see if you guys will post any opinions. I want feedback so if you love me say something!!!!
please come down
act like you really love me
im wearing the most beautiful gown
please come down i wore it just for you
tell me how beautiful i look
that you never want to let me go
tell me that you will stop
i don't want to be another Jane Doe
i don't want another bruise
i don't want another lie
i know that i will surely lose
if i try to put up a fight
every promise is broken
all trust is destroyed
every time i look you in the eye
i brace myself for another lie
...another bruise
...another broken promise
finally its time for you to choose
be careful for you may lose
Monday, December 10, 2007
Maybe i don't completely stink..
Posted by Marissa at 4:29:00 PM
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oh oh oh! this is the one i really liked!
yep it is thats why i put it up
yay! i'm happy i really like it! :D
thanks i do too
hey missa, this is pretty good!!
you rhyme very well. I don't typically make poems (or songs) that rhyme.
thanks according to carly that was my best one.. but im glad that other people like it too
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